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The diagram below shows how the Australian Bureau of Meteorology collects up-to-the-minute information on the weather in order to produce reliable forecasts. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The diagram below shows how the Australian Bureau of Meteorology collects up-to-the-minute information on the weather in order to produce reliable forecasts. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
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The diagram illustrates how the Australian Bureau of Meteorology
up-to-date
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 their
date
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data
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 about
weather
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the weather
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 in order to produce trusty forecasts.
Overall
 there are 4 main steps from collecting incoming
information
 to
broadcast
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.
Final
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 step should be supported
with
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 preparing the
broadcast
 which must be done after proper analysis and forecasting. First and foremost, incoming
information
provided
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by
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through different technological devices
such
 as a radar, a satellite, and a
driffting
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drifting
 buoy. The collected incomes simulate different types of maps on a radar screen or a
satellite's
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 photo. These maps are basically infographics and
used
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 for analysis and forecasting. After forecasting finished, different sources of
information
 altogether mixed and ready for streaming.
Moreover
,
these
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mixed
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 of
information
improved
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 with a desktop,
then
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and then
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prepared
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the prepared
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broadcast
 is ready for servicing.Eventually,
this
broadcast
 can be served as
TV
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a TV
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 show ,through
TV
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a TV
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newsreader
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newsreaders
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,
or
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apply
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radio
podcast
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podcasts
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,
even
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or even
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recorded
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a recorded
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announcement
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announcements
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words information, broadcast with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 4 times.
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