The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005. (million)

The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005. (million)
The given table provides information about the changes in people who went on overseas travel in
the
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Africa, America, Asia and the Pacific,
Europe
and the
Middle
East in four different years.
Overall
, it can be seen that the number of travellers increase over the year with
Europe
as the top tourist destination among the five countries
while
the
Middle
East is the least visited.
According to
the graph, in 1990, 18.2 people
million
travelled to Africa, 80.5
million
to America,
60.2
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and 60.2
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million
to Asia and the Pacific. 9.8
million
to the
Middle
East and 280.2
million
to
Europe
. ,
Meanwhile
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in 1995, the number of international travellers increased in figures to a total of 615.2
million
travellers. The same happened in 2000 and 2005, more and more tourists spend time travelling, with a total of 669.2
million
and 693.7
million
respectively. The most visited country was
Europe
followed by Asia and the Pacific,
then
America, next is Africa and
lastly
the
Middle
East.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words europe, middle, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.

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  • significant increase
  • international travel
  • popular destinations
  • economic growth
  • technological advancements
  • ease of travel
  • cultural exchange
  • globalization
  • fluctuations
  • trend
  • millions of travelers
  • annual growth rate
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