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Some people say that noise made by people should be strictly controlled while others say they should be free to make noise without limitation. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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In some perspectives, restrictions regarding
noise
pollution
 should be stringent,
while
 others hold different opinions. The former suggests that
noise
 will derive various negative effects, reversedly, the latter
believe
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believes
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 it is the right of
humen
Correct your spelling
humans
 to make sounds. 
To begin
 with, I agree that it is necessary for a law forcing departments to stop the deterioration of
noise
pollution
 since too much
noise
 not only downgrades the quality of sleep, which will increase anxiety and cause mental illness in the long term but stimulate physical harm on young individuals .
For example
, in many big cities around the world,
noise
pollution
 become a serious social issue, many statistics indicate a great number of residents in these areas suffer from depression caused by
such
 problems,
nonetheless
, it will cause hearing problems and heart diseases.
Therefore
 many specialists urge governments to make regulations to ensure a better living environment. 
On the other hand
, there are people who don't want to trade in the perks of commercial revenues since it could slow down the development of local economies. Considering that
such
 rules may reduce working hours in construction industries, which will slow down the progress of cities. They believe there are other methods to reduce the influence of
noise
, including using better soundproof materials, compared to making harsh rules to keep people from making noises. 
To conclude
, despite that strict rules to prevent
noise
pollution
 may cause drawbacks to the progress of local development, taking all the negative effects caused by
noise
 into perspective, I agree that it is essential for correlative departments to reduce
noise
pollution
 for the sake of public health.
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