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Some people say that people need to do multiple jobs or one job. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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The issue of whether
people
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one
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job
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do multiple jobs is widely debated. In
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both statements with relevant examples and give my own personal opinion. There are
plethora
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 of reasons
of
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why individuals prefer to stay in
one
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job
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 and the prominent
one
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 is stability.
This
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 is because when
people
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one
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job
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, they become extremely comfortable with the existing work environment.
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 they
scared
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 of losing their income by switching to another
job
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. An eminent example of it,
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one
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 of my school
teacher
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teachers
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 who is working in the same school
from
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 the past 20 years,
while
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 he is not having enough income to pay for
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 educational services.
Apart from
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, some old aged
people
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technological advancement.
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, they are so confused when it comes to
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 the various devices.
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 on the other side,
few
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 individuals claim that it is better to do multiple jobs as it definitely
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 the financial situation of any person.
Firstly
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, It is
due to
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 the reason that
people
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additional
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 amount of money that can help them later in life. To illustrate it, Amitabh
kapoor
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 who is
an
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 famous
indian
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 film actor,
also
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 established his own sports brand just to get
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more
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fame and money by influencing
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g generation of the country.
Secondly
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,
by
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working
something
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on something
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 different
that is
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 not only limited to their own interest can lead to boost
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confidence.
Therefore
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 they feel motivated to perform well in that particular field by investing more energy and time.
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,
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cultural diversity can be promoted when
people
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 start interacting with other nations.
Therefore
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 the cultural gaps and differences can fade away. In conclusion,
although
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of
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 staying in
one
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job
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, I hold the view that
people
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 need to understand the value of adapting the news trends with
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the change
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change
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of
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 time and development.

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