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Some people say that people need to do multiple jobs or one job. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #jobs #job
The issue of whether
people
 should stick to
one
job
 or
to
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do multiple jobs is widely debated. In
this
 essay, I will argue
on
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both statements with relevant examples and give my own personal opinion. There are
plethora
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 of reasons
of
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why individuals prefer to stay in
one
 particular
job
 and the prominent
one
 is stability.
This
 is because when
people
 work in
one
job
, they become extremely comfortable with the existing work environment.
Therefore
 they
scared
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 of losing their income by switching to another
job
. An eminent example of it,
one
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is one
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 of my school
teacher
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teachers
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 who is working in the same school
from
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 the past 20 years,
while
 he is not having enough income to pay for
best
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 educational services.
Apart from
this
, some old aged
people
 are not able to build a good connection with
the
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technological advancement.
Therefore
, they are so confused when it comes to
use
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 the various devices.
While
 on the other side,
few
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 individuals claim that it is better to do multiple jobs as it definitely
improve
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 the financial situation of any person.
Firstly
, It is
due to
 the reason that
people
 can earn
additional
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an additional
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 amount of money that can help them later in life. To illustrate it, Amitabh
kapoor
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Kapoor
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 who is
an
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a
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 famous
indian
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Indian
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 film actor,
also
 established his own sports brand just to get
more
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more
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fame and money by influencing
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you
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g generation of the country.
Secondly
,
by
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working
something
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 different
that is
 not only limited to their own interest can lead to boost
the
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confidence.
Therefore
 they feel motivated to perform well in that particular field by investing more energy and time.
Finally
,
the
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cultural diversity can be promoted when
people
 start interacting with other nations.
Therefore
 the cultural gaps and differences can fade away. In conclusion,
although
 there are many good points
of
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 staying in
one
job
, I hold the view that
people
 need to understand the value of adapting the news trends with
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the change
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change
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of
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 time and development.
Submitted by Navneet Dhand on

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