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In the future, nobody will but printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extends do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#future #nobody #newspapers #books
The phenomenon of the internet will take over newspaper
books
 has aroused wide concern among various circles. Divergent as
people
's views on
this
 issue in question may be, I totally agree that it is an inevitable result that reading online will become the only option for
people
 to read. Of all the reasons why
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printed material will be replaced by online reading, probably the most significant one is that it has lower pollution to the environment. To illustrate,
the
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printed
books
 and
others
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other
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 printed
marterial
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material
 need a huge amount of
paper
, and trees
is
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 the main resource of
paper
 production.
Hence
, there are a lot of trees are being cut every year. It is no need to explain how trees are important to humans' survival and the earth. With the
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rapidly
increased
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 population and businesses, the demand for
paper
 is
also
increasedalso
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increased also
increase also
 increased to a frightening level.
As a result
,
people
 start to use interest and
computer
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 to replace
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traditional things like
paper
. Another reason that should not be overlooked is that reading online is very suitable for
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modern
people
.
People
 can read any information which includes images anywhere and anytime through a small device
such
 as a mobile phone or laptop.
Therefore
,
people
 just need to carry their devices in order to finish
thier
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their
 tasks or find any information they want to know.
For instance
, teachers have a lot of teaching materials for the lessons. They can
uupload
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upload
 on the internet for their students to download from. In the past, they had to carry all the
material
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 to the classroom and give them to the students. It is
waste
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a waste
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 of
tiime
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time
 and the materials are too heavy
to
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 teachers because there are too
much
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many
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marterials
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materials
material
.
As a result
, many
people
 like to use
internet
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the internet
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 to read and work. Under
this
 line of thinking, it seems to me that
people
 would like to read online rather than read those printed
books
 since it is
environmental
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 friendly and
user friendly
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. So, I completely agree that printed
books
 and newspapers will be taken over by reading online.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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