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Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of transnationalism

It is said that transnationalism argues that
migrants
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 abandon their native culture when moving to another
country
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. They actually keep their language and culture and maintain the connection with their families in their home countries.
To begin
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migrants
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 connect
each
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with each
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 other and with their homes via social networks and
such
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. Not only does it help send money and goods back home, but it
also
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 allows them to watch national TV and news. Another example is that technology helps
migrants
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 connect with their fellows in the
host
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country
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 and create communities. Another asset is that there are migrant organisations which promote the migrant
country
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 within
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host
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 society.
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result
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 locals experience positive cultural exchange and everyone benefits. The
migrants
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 receive hospitality and
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host
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country
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 receives happy and reliable people.
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, transnationalism can lead to
isolation
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the isolation
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 of
migrants
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 within
host
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 countries.
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, there may be created groups of people who do not assimilate or integrate into
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 community.
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 transnational communities participate fully in the
host
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 society. All things considered, in my opinion, the pros outweigh
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the cons
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. Transnationalism is a step to be taken to enter the future. A future that does not make difference between skin,
colours
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colour
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,
religious
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religion
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,
cultures
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culture
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 and
languages
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language
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.

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