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Some people believe that governments should pay full course fees for students who want to study at universities. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#people #governments #course #fees #students #study #universities
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It is argued that the
course
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 costs of
university
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students
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 should be paid by the government. In my opinion,
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 it can bring some drawbacks, I am in agreement with the statement. Regarding the disadvantage, the full
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 pay can be a financial burden to the country. Not only the fee for the
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 per scholar are normally high, but
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 there is a large number of
students
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 enrolled on the
university
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, including those who do not have sufficient money to study
university
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 in the first place.
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, the governments do not have enough cash to pay all.
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, with the increase
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population, the money needed is increasing over time.
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, in some countries that have a young-age population, the number of scholars will significantly go up year by year. But despite having a drawback, governments pay for the costs of courses the
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 can bring many advantages.
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 support makes more people seek
university
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-level education. The
students
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 who are not affordable to study can now have a better educational environment.
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, poor
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 can have the same opportunity to learn compared to other scholars.
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as everyone can enrol in the
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 without any fees, the knowledge of the people in the country will increase.
Students
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 have access to official advanced knowledge easier, and
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, their advanced skills of people will be enhanced.
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,
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 there is a disadvantage, the countries should support the
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 costs for
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 attendants. For those benefits, I believed that the governments should pay the full
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 expenditure of
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students
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 not only to have more scholars but
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 to enhance the people’s advanced skills. As the education level goes up, the country’s finance should be increased.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Higher education
  • University tuition
  • Public good
  • Economic growth
  • Fiscal responsibility
  • Merit-based scholarships
  • Need-based grants
  • Socioeconomic status
  • Educational equity
  • Income-contingent loans
  • Graduate tax
  • Financial aid
  • Student loans
  • Subsidize
  • Taxpayer funding
  • Underappreciation
  • Workforce development
  • Access to education
  • Higher learning institutions
  • Government expenditure
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