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The table below gives information about populations in Australia and Malaysia in 1980 and 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information about populations in Australia and Malaysia in 1980 and 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given table compares six demographic indicators of
Australia
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 and
Malaysia
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 in the years 1980 and 2002.
Overall
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,
while
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 the
population
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 size in both countries increased considerably over the
period
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,
Malaysia
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 grew at a much higher rate. Despite comparable figures for the male and female populations, the two countries saw noticeable differences in the rates of birth, average annual growth, and ageing
population
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. Over a 22-year
period
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, the total
population
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 in both countries saw a sharp rise in the figure for
Malaysia
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 nearly doubling to 24.3 million
while
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Australia
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 increased from 14.7 to 19.6 million. The percentage of men and women in
Australia
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 remained steady during the
period
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, at 49.9% and 50.1% respectively.
In contrast
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, the Malaysian male
population
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 increased its proportion by 0.3% (50.6%)
while
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 there was a gradual decline of 0.3% for females (49.4%). A deep analysis of the table provided reveals the two nations experienced a dip in birth rates over a
period
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 of 22 years. The elderly in
Australia
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 and
Malaysia
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,
by contrast
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, saw significant growth in
population
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, by 2.8% and 0.6% respectively.
Moreover
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, the average
population
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 growth rate grew by 0.1% in
Australia
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 yet fell by 1% for the other nation.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words australia, malaysia, population, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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