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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the average number of UK commuters travelling each day by car, bus or train between 1970 and 2030. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the average number of UK commuters travelling each day by car, bus or train between 1970 and 2030. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The given line graph illustrates the median
number
 of commuters who are travelling
with
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in
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 different vehicles, between 1970 and 2030. X-axis represents
year
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the year
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, and Y-axis reveals citizens'
number
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numbers
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 as millions.
Overall
, car preference is estimated to peaked 9
million
 individuals in 2030.Car and train travels
were
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apply
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tend to increase
besides
 bus
travels
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travel
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. Travelling by bus shows
slightly
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a slightly
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 decreasing trend over time and reached just below 3
million
 in 2029. Between 1970 and 1980,
car
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the car
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 travelling
of
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by
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 commuters slightly increased and after 1980
rapid
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a rapid
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 rose can be seen
untill
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until
 2000.
In addition
,
this
 period
followed
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was followed
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 by a decade of
consistent
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a consistent
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number
 of people.
For those
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Those
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 who
prefered
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prefer
 train for travelling gradually rose between 1970-2000 and reached 3
million
. After 10 years of steady period. Train
preferance
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preference
 amount reached over 5
million
 in 2025.
Nevertheless
, In 1970,
travelling
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the travelling
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with
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by
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 bus
number
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numbers
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 were around 4
millions
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million
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, and after a decade,
slightly
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the slightly
a slightly
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 decreased trend can be observed for 20 years. These numbers were
brief
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a brief
the brief
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 summary of the given line graph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
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