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There have been some problems with public transport in your area recently. Write a letter to the manager of the transport company. In your letter: ·       Describe the problems ·       Explain how these problems are affecting the public ·       Suggest some changes that could be made Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to bring to your attention some ongoing issues with public
transport
 in our area that have been causing significant inconvenience for residents. Over the past few weeks, I have noticed that buses are consistently running late or, in some cases, not arriving at all.
This
 unreliability has made it difficult for commuters to get to work or appointments on time. The problems with public
transport
 are affecting the daily lives of many individuals in our community. Students are arriving late to school, employees are missing important meetings, and individuals relying on public
transport
 for essential trips are experiencing unnecessary stress.
In addition
, the overcrowding on the fewer buses that do arrive has made for uncomfortable travel conditions. To address these issues, I suggest that the
transport
 company increase the frequency of bus services, especially during peak hours, and implement a real-time tracking system that allows passengers to see the location of buses. Improved communication regarding delays or schedule changes would
also
 greatly benefit passengers. Thank you for your attention to
this
 matter. I hope to see improvements in our public
transport
 system soon. Sincerely, Trang Dao
Submitted by minhtrang.dao on

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task achievement
Consider adding more specific examples of real-time tracking benefits.
coherence cohesion
Maybe use transition words like 'Additionally' or 'Furthermore' to enhance flow.
coherence cohesion
The letter presents a clear introduction, body, and conclusion.
task achievement
You have maintained a polite and formal tone throughout the letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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