Nowadays a growing number of boys and girls within normal weight ranges have an intense fear of gaining weight and therefore get anorexia. Why do you think a lot of teenagers have a strong desire to be skinny? What can be done to prevent this eating disorder?

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Recently, it has become an ongoing issue that teenagers have
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pressured
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to be skinny regardless of their sex.
This
essay will present my personal view with respect to
this
current trend and will suggest several solutions dealing with
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To begin
with, in
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world, it has been beauty criteria that
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skinny is more attractive.
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this
notion is too simplified, it has been rooted in
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deeply to the point where it can be hardly removed. In fact, I had a classmate who was suffered from anorexia and she eventually dropped out of my school
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she sent
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to malnutrient. Through the experience, I got to
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strongly
believe that nothing is
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than being healthy both mentally and physically, still less,
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beautiful never
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.  One key reason
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this
trend can be
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attributed
to our lack of respect
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food
. After
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a period
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of double world wars, we
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appreciated for
food
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been common about a century ago.
Additionally
,
this
ill-trend has been
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accelerated
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occurrence
of cheap
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fast food
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Thus
, I believe it is important for teenagers to be educated
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importance of substantials in school lessons by being taught about
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the history
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of famine and
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of
food
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,
for example
. It will enhance
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their
understanding of eating
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for
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human
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.  In conclusion,
young
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the young
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generation has been likely to
exssesively
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excessively
desire to be
thiner
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thinner
, which can lead
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social
peoblem
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problem
of
eading
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eating
reading
disorder
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However
, I believe it can be dealt with by
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schools
provision of sufficient knowledge of
food
importance
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