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Some people think that it is necessary to travel abroad to learn about other countries, but other people think that it is necessary to travel abroad because all the information can be seen on TV and the Internet. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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People
 have a multitude of views about the ways of learning about foreign
countries
 and their
cultures
.
While
 some
people
 may think that it is unnecessary to travel abroad as we are able to know a lot of
information
 about other
countries
 through different media, I still believe that visiting other
countries
 is the best way to learn about their
cultures
. Without any doubt, with the advancement of technology, we can access a large amount of
information
 about foreign
countries
 through different ways
such
 as watching
television
 programs and surfing the
Internet
.
For example
, there are several documentary programs on the National Geographic Channel, which introduce the life of other
people
 who are living in other
countries
. Through watching these kinds of programmes, it is true that we could already have a brief understanding of other
countries
 even though we do not visit those
countries
, which, in turn, can save
people
's money and time for travelling.
However
, I think that travelling aboard is still a better way for
people
 to learn about other
countries
due to
 several reasons. The most significant reason is that the
information
 from the
Internet
 and
television
 may not be absolutely true.
Although
 we could learn a lot of knowledge about other
countries
 on
television
 or websites, we could never ensure that all the
information
 is correct. Take
television
 programmes as an example,
people
 tend to talk about some things that are attractive in the programs in order to gain viewers' attention, and
hence
, some of the facts or
cultures
 of other
countries
 may not be fully covered in the program.
Therefore
, it is necessary for
people
 to visit the places physically and experience and learn about other
cultures
 in person.
Besides
, travelling to other
countries
 allow
people
 to have two-way communication with foreigners
while
 watching
television
 program or surfing
information
 on the
Internet
 is a one-way communication. Talking to others
people
 can enhance our understanding of their
life
Replace the word
lives
show examples
 and
cultures
. In conclusion,
although
 we can have a brief understanding of other
countries
 by watching
television
 or reading
information
 on the
Internet
, I still believe that it is necessary to travel abroad in order to have a deep and full understanding of other
cultures
.
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