Some people say that advertisinzg is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

The phenomenon of the massive advertisements surrounding us and brainwashing us to buy some products that we do not need has aroused wide concern among various circles. Divergent as
people
's views on
this
issue in question may be, I personally believe that we all under the affection of advertising without our awareness. On one hand, some say that
people
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advertisement surrounding us for a long period, so we are immune from its' affection. They believe that
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should be able to prevent the brainwashing attack from
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ads on TV or
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the internet
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.
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,
people
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advertising context is too
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or not.
Therefore
, they would just
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ignore
gone
those ads.
On the other hand
, some
people
argue that those advertising companies
already
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successed
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succeeded
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to control the public to purchase their promoting products. To illustrate,
people
already accept the concept
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enjoying our life, and to do that
people
should spend money on themself in order to improve their quality of life.
For example
, if some products
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advertising
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as
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health
product
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products
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, most
people
would like to buy them because they are good for their
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. Of
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course
, there are many
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have
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that have
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been proven that it is not useful for
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the improvement
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of our health.
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evidence of
people
how getting
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by
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advertising without our consciousness. Under
this
line of thinking, it seems to me that
although
people
have
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from advertisements for a long period, it is not
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that we are
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to prevent it. In fact, we are being
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gradually
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affected
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by those messages from ads. So, I believe that advertising is successful to control humans.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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