Tourism is one of the fastest growing industries and contributes a great deal to economies around the world. however, the damage tourism can cause to local cultures and the environment is often ignored. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Currently,
tourism
is a field that improving rapidly and bringing huge amounts of income to every country's budget. While
, according to
the majority's thoughts, people should concern
about its adverse impacts on the Wrong verb form
be concerned
culture
and the environment of local areas as our priority. But I disagree with this
issue because usually many tourists are attracted by specifically local customs and nature and are highly respectful towards them, as well as
with the help of massive economical
profits, any problem regarding Correct word choice
economic
this
phenomenon can be solved quite easily.
It is obvious
fact that in most cases, travellers have a great interest in and a strong admiration for the place Correct article usage
an obvious
going to
visit which provides them with being eco-friendly and respectful to the host Verb problem
they
culture
. In other words
, when people visit somewhere they really like and want to be, they always act in their most polite and conscientious way. In addition
, tourism
is the best way to make the world aware of a particular culture
. For example
, in Uzbekistan, especially, in Tashkent, people encounter tourists wearing Uzbek national clothes prepared from an "atlas" more than local residences.
Furthermore
, as tourism
is one of the highest pricing industries, the country which holds a huge number of tourists annually is capable of developing at a high pace. Thanks to the economical
income from tourist services, if any kind of environmental problem appears, the government can pay for the costly research in order to tackle it fast and effectively. Replace the word
economic
Besides
, substantial profits may lead to organising cultural events like festivals which are very handy for the improvement of that culture
In conclusion, it is my personal belief that despite many contrasting opinions, tourism
has no negative influence on the customs and the nature of locals and it should be kept developing.Submitted by uskanovjavokhir07 on
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