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people use things in a short time then throw them away. What are its causes and what are its problems? What could be done to address this issue?

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People
 nowadays tend to purchase new items
instead
 of repairing the old
one
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 since the costs of manufacturing are cheaper with advanced technology.
Such
 phenomena derive various environmental problems, be it water or air pollution. Both governments and individuals have obligation to deter the situation from getting worst, the former can stringent the regulations of recycling to minimize the negative influence on the natural environment , latter could contribute to societies by
refuse
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 to purchase trendy
products
 which can be used only for a short period of time.
To begin
 with, one of the main causes of a perpetuated growth population, who are accustomed to buying
products
, that will only be used for a short period of time before being
disposed
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,
is
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 the massive production which allows commercial facilities to provide competitive prices. Despite the perks of lower costs to satisfy the need of consumers, it could provoke serious damage to mother earth, since there is no
such
countermasure
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countermeasure
countermeasures
 of wastes handling
is
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 able to cause no pollution, through and through,
while
 burying garbage underground will contaminate soil, so does water sources around the areas, burning wastes will produce toxical gas and influence the quality of air in a negative way. To tackle
such
 problems, governments should be harsher on commercial companies to ensure
wasts
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wastes
waste
waists
 are handled properly during
productive
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 processes,
such
 as increasing the fines for those who illegally dispose of subproducts. On top of that, it is essential for
people
 to think twice before purchasing new
products
 to prevent unnecessary waste.
To conclude
, the most likely reason that stimulates a growing number of
people
, who prefer buying new
products
 compared to fixing the original one, is cheaper production when high-tech machines are introduced in production industries, which fosters the deterioration of different types of pollution. It depends on the cooperation between
people
 and law force departments to solve problems together.
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