In some countries, a few people earn extremely high salaries. Some people think that this is good for a country, while others believe that the government should control salaries and limit the amount people can earn. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Some
countries
have offered a good
Correct the article-noun agreement
good wages
a good wage
wages
which is
thought by some individuals, Change the verb form
are
while
some people
's opinion are
that the government should put some restrictions Change the verb form
is
in
high Change preposition
on
salaries
. I think that ,
most Remove the comma
apply
countries
should prefer high wages
for their economic development and for people
's welfare. This
essay will examine the
both Remove the article
apply
side
and Fix the agreement mistake
sides
also
will provide logical
Add an article
a logical
the logical
opinion
.
Fix the agreement mistake
opinions
To begin
with, if the administration gives good
amount of payment, it will be beneficial for the Add an article
a good
country
's wellbeing
. Correct your spelling
well-being
Such
as, people
can easily concern on
their work. Change preposition
about
Furthermore
, they can fulfill
their basic needs and Change the spelling
fulfil
also
lead a luxurious life. Individuals can lead a peaceful and happiness
life if they get Replace the word
happy
the
high Correct article usage
apply
salaries
which will remove family's
poverty. Correct article usage
the family's
For
this
reason, the person can enjoy their lives without any worries, anxiety and
depression. Correct word choice
or
For example
, the Daily Star newspaper was
represented that Unnecessary verb
apply
American
, Australia and other Correct your spelling
America
develop
Change the form of the verb
developed
countries
have given the
high Correct article usage
apply
salaries
which is
reducing Change the verb form
are
suicidal
Add an article
the suicidal
occurrence
, Fix the agreement mistake
occurrences
people
's heart attack
and so on. Fix the agreement mistake
attacks
That is
why, most of
Change preposition
apply
the
Correct article usage
apply
countries
should concern people's
monetary sectors.
Change preposition
about people's
However
, if a few country
put some restrictions on Change to a plural noun
countries
people
's salary and they are not only restrict
it but Change the verb form
are not only restricting
also
have
some limitations, it will provide a negative effect on the Wrong verb form
having
country
's economic
. Replace the word
economy
Firstly
, workers will lose their interest on
the work. Change preposition
in
Besides
, they will try to go Change preposition
to well
well furnished
Add a hyphen
well-furnished
country
where will get high wages
and it will create the problem of country's
prosperity. Correct article usage
the country's
For instance
, the Gurdian
Correct your spelling
Guardian
was published
Change the verb form
has published
a
article about developing Change the article
an
country's
economic sectors where 40% Fix the agreement mistake
countries'
industries
were locked because they did not give good payment to Change preposition
of industries
Add an article
the employee
employee
and the employee resigned Fix the agreement mistake
employees
their
job for that reason.
My opinion is thatChange preposition
from their
,
most of the Remove the comma
apply
country
should aware about
Change preposition
of
employee's
Change noun form
employee
wages
because it will he
the Correct your spelling
be
maim
key to success Correct your spelling
main
in
the economic Change preposition
on
sides
. High Fix the agreement mistake
side
salaries
will bear country's
welfare Correct article usage
the country's
as well as
people
's satisfaction on
their work.
In conclusion, the government Change preposition
with
who
have given high payment,Correct pronoun usage
that
they
get various type of positive response Correct pronoun usage
apply
on
their economy, Change preposition
to
while
, the country
have
Change the verb form
has
controlled
Replace the word
control
in
the Change preposition
over
salaries
and it do
not bring any blessing Change the verb form
does
on
the Change preposition
to
country
's development. So , my point of view is that,
the authority should follow the essay's first statement.Remove the comma
apply
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