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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017
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The following graph illustrates the
number
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 of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island from 2010 to 2017.
Overall
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, the
number
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 of tourists visiting has increased from 1
million
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 to 3.5
million
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 over 7 years.
Firstly
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, the
number
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 of visitors staying on cruise ships increased from 0.2
million
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 to 0.5
million
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 between 2010 to 2011.
Then
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, the
number
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 of visitors staying on cruise ships reduced from 0.5 to 0.2 between 2011 to 2012 and it increased again to 0.5
million
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 in 2013. From 2013 to 2017, it sharply increased from 0.5
million
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 to 2
million
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.
Secondly
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, the
number
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 of visitors staying on the Island has steadily by 0.5
million
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 from 2010 to 2011. It increased from 0.5
million
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 to 1.5
million
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 from 2011 to 2013. Again, it has steadily by 1.5
million
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 from 2013 to 2015. It has reduced from 1.5
million
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 to 1.2
million
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 and again it has increased back to 1.5
million
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 at end of the year.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • trough
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • steady increase
  • sharp decline
  • seasonal variation
  • cruise ship visitors
  • island stay visitors
  • economic impact
  • environmental impact
  • tourism industry
  • sustainable tourism
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