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Some people believe studying in a college or university is the best way to prepare for a successful career. Other people prefer to get a job as soon as they leave school and to develop their career through work experience. Discuss both views and give your own opinio

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It is true that some people believe studying in a college or university is
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important to prepare for
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 future.
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 it is widely believed that they should leave school and develop their career On the one hand, it is argued by
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that, when
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 pupils complete their academic qualification it is easy for them
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 jobs in certain fields
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On the other hand
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 their job or the role they have to perform
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electricians
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 require
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 than
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theoritical
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theoretical
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 field to learn and practice to gain more
experience
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because
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believe
 a person who is experienced will perform a better job than one with no working background. A particularly good example here is
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 if someone is applying for a higher
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management
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management
 position they will require
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both
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both
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 believe that both academic and educational qualifications are equally important for students to develop
experience
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 as certain jobs require academic and
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 most students
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their studies
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 and work hard
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