Some people think living in big cities is bad for people's health. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Nowadays, there are many
people
who want to move to an urban city from a rural area in order to explore the possibility of their future success. On the other hand
, some people
have a negative thought
Fix the agreement mistake
thoughts
of
living in urban Change preposition
about
cities
in terms of health
conditions. I understand why they think that way, because the more people
, the higher the death rates. However
, I personally think the environments in big cities
may not affect people
's health
in bad ways.
First of all, some major serious diseases such
as diabetes and cancers have been increased not so much by the size of cities
, but by the change of lifestyle. For example
, western food has been getting more and more popular in Japan and that is
related to the increase of
diabetics. Change preposition
in
Therefore
, it can not be said that the density of population
is connected with lifespans.
Correct article usage
the population
Secondly
, there are more exercise facilities like fitness gyms and yoga studios in urban cities
compared to rural areas. That environment provides people
with more opportunities to think about their health
. In addition
to this
, many large events are hosted by big cities
. For instance
, marathon events take place every year and a lot of people
from all over the world participate in those events.
In conclusion, some people
are worried about how much big cities
influence our health
but I would say that the size of cities
does not matter and if anything, there is more attention to keep
Wrong verb form
keeping
people
healthy in big cities
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