Some people think living in big cities is bad for people's health. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays, there are many
people
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who want to move to an urban city from a rural area in order to explore the possibility of their future success.
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, some
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have a negative
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living in urban
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in terms of
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conditions. I understand why they think that way, because the more
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, the higher the death rates.
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, I personally think the environments in big
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may not affect
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's
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in bad ways. First of all, some major serious diseases
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as diabetes and cancers have been increased not so much by the size of
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, but by the change of lifestyle.
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, western food has been getting more and more popular in Japan and
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related to the increase
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diabetics.
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, it can not be said that the density of
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is connected with lifespans.
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, there are more exercise facilities like fitness gyms and yoga studios in urban
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compared to rural areas. That environment provides
people
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with more opportunities to think about their
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.
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, many large events are hosted by big
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.
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, marathon events take place every year and a lot of
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from all over the world participate in those events. In conclusion, some
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are worried about how much big
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influence our
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but I would say that the size of
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does not matter and if anything, there is more attention to
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people
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healthy in big
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • respiratory problems
  • population density
  • stress levels
  • mental health issues
  • sedentary lifestyles
  • healthcare facilities
  • cardiovascular diseases
  • psychological well-being
  • recreational areas
  • social networks
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