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Writing Samples
Band 6

You study at a college in the city centre. You use public transport to get to the college but the bus service you use has changed. Write a letter to the manager of the bus company. In the letter, -Say who you are and the details of service you use -Explain the problem with the bus service -Suggest what you think the manager should do

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Dear Sir, I am writing
this
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 letter to inform you regarding the rescheduling of the public transport
service
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 that was assigned from Glen Waverley to
Mebourne
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Melbourne
 which was changed recently without any formal information. My name is Deeshan Bandara, a daily commuter who is frequently travelling from the local suburb to the city. The only main transport mode we had since we are located in a regional area was your esteemed bus
service
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 which the whole neighbourhood was using for their
day today
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day-to-day
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 life activities.
Furthermore
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, I was informed that it will no longer be in
service
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 in the mornings
due to
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 construction activities along the route.
Moreover
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, the evening scheduled trip which
meant
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was meant
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 to start from the city to the town
is
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 cancelled without
a
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notice.
However
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, since
this
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 has become a major issue for many of the passengers, I would suggest
to change
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changing
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 the route without cancelling the
service
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 and
increase
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 the fare with a reliable amount. Looking forward to hearing from you. Yours sincerely, Deeshan

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task achievement
Consider providing more specific details about how the changes have affected your daily commute, such as delays or missed classes.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that your paragraphs focus on one main idea to enhance clarity and reader understanding.
coherence and cohesion
The letter begins and ends with a polite greeting and closing, which sets a positive tone.
task achievement
Your suggestion for a route change and fare increase shows you have thought about potential solutions to the problem.
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