the diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks.

the diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks.
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the diagram illustrates the process by which carbonated drinks are made.
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, the process of making carbonated drinks requires five stages in total. it starts with the raw material being transported from the factory by mechanical means and culminates when bottles and cans of final products are packaged to deliver to the supermarket. looking at the detail, in the first stage, raw material transmitted from the factory is filtered by a small part of the machine,
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the refined drink is softened, and chemicals are added to it. following that,
water
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is pumped through a pipe into electric heaters, which later is converted into an enclosed container via a cooling pipe. carbon dioxide is added to the amount of
water
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in
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container. the process continues with carbonated
water
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being transported to a mixing tank through a long pipe, where the addition of colouring, syrup and flavour is included. afterwards, the carbonated
water
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is filtered again in order to fill in bottles and cans.
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, these bottles and cans are packaged into boxes that are delivered to the supermarket.
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