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The table below gives information about the languages that high school students speak at home in one school district in the USA

The table below gives information about the languages that high school students speak at home in one school district in the USA
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The table gives data about the top
languages
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 spoken at home by
students
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 in 2008 and 2014. Spanish was the most common
language
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 used with 15 110
students
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 in 2008 and 28 816 schoolchildren in 2014. The
Korean
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language
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 accounted for the second most widespread
language
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. The number of pupils speaking
Korean
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 was 3029 in 2008 and it decreased to 2735 in 2014. The third most popular
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 was Vietnam with figures of 2557 and 1467 children between 2008 and 2014. The Chinese
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 was spoken by 1875 school
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 in 2008 and
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 figure soared to 4670 in 2014. There was a small number of 430 Arabic speakers at school and it grew a lot to 1302 speakers. The rarest spoken speech was Nepalese with only 85
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 in 2008 and the number of spoken Nepalese
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language
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 went up to 439 in 2014.
Korean
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,
Vietnamese
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and Vietnamese
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languages
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 were considered the second and third most widely spoken
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 in 2008 and Chinese became the second most commonly spoken
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Korean
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 ranked third place among
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 in 2014.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words languages, students, language, korean with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "gives" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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