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Some parents think that helping their children with homework is good. Others think children should do their homework on their own. Discuss both views and give your opinion

#parents #children #homework
Nowadays many
parents
 think that helping their sons and daughters to do
homework
 is perfect. ,
However
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 others believe that
children
 necessary do their
homework
 on their own. From my point of view if the
children
 do their
homework
 on their own it can be one of the effective ways to improve. First of all,
children
 need to use their minds because their
parents
 do not help at every moment.
For instance
, teenagers have to pass exams with their minds because their
parents
 cannot pass exams for their
children
. ,
Also
 it has a reason which is related to
this
 situation if the
parents
 help their
children
 to do their
homework
 every time, Absolutly
children
's mind and their imagination do not improve.
However
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 it has the benefit of helping
children
 to do their
homework
. Sometimes teachers give a lot of home tasks to
children
which
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 are studying in a kindergarten or primary school, and
children
 have been challenged to do
homework
.
Therefore
 in
this
 kind of situation
parents
 necessary help their
children
 to do their home tasks.
To conclude
, I suppose that
parents
 need to help their
children
 only when they have challenges doing
homework
 and
this
 kind of situation might help
children
 to improve their background knowledge
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Task Response
Ensure that you fully address both views in the essay and provide a clear opinion.
Coherence & Cohesion
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