The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.
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the line graph compares the
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of newly opened
shops
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and the
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of closed
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from 2011 to 2018 in a country.
overall
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,
it is clear that
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the
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of both opened new
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and closed
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saw a decrease during
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period. the
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of closed
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experienced a dramatic change. About 8500
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were opened in 2011,
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the
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for opened
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rapidly declined to around 4000 in 2012. by 2014, it rose to about 6100. after that, the
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of opened
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fell back to around 4000, and remain stable at
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by 2017. by 2018, the
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for opened
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decreased to 3000. there were about 6300
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closed in 2011. during the next three years, the
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for closed
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fluctuated between 6000 and 7000. by 2015, the
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of closed
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reached its lowest point at 700 (fell from 6600) .
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its
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increased back to 5200 rapidly by 2016. from 2016 to 2018, the
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for closed
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steadily remained at about 5200 and was higher than the
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for opened
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, shops, figure with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 7 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rapidly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • decline
  • surge
  • stabilize
  • correlation
  • economic conditions
  • consumer behavior
  • technological advancements
  • urban development
  • employment
  • retail sector
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