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It is better to bua just a few expensive clothes, rather than lots of cheaper clothes. Do you agree or disagree?

#bua #clothes #lots
Some people prefer to purchase only a few high-priced
clothes
instead
 of
bying
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buying
being
 many
cheap
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. I fully agree with
this
 approach since it gives an opportunity to save more personal resources and allows
to
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 make a small positive input into the climate change issue. The first reason behind the approach of buying a few
expernsive
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expensive
clothes
 is its potential to help in saving more money and time in the long-term perspective.
While
 some spend their own finances and energy
for
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 new
clothes
 each season, I prefer to go
for
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a
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shopping only once in a
three year
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 period.
This
 is the reason why I spend more
at
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the
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 particular moment when buying new things.
However
, I purchase only
high quality
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 goods which will not
detiriorate
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deteriorate
 after a short period of
using
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.
For example
, I bought my classic shoes more than five years ago, and they will
definately
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definitely
 serve me
three
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 years more.
Secondly
, the tendency to consume
less
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 goods has a positive effect on the climate change issue.
According to
scientists
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 reports, factories and non-recycled waste have a huge carbon footprint. Since
the
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high CO2 emission is one of the main drawbacks of
massive
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 consumption era,
the
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shopping habits have becoming to play a greater role in the global warming agenda during the
last
 decades. I,
personaly
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personally
, feel a huge responsibility for
a
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nature and by reducing the
amount
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 of items purchased I can have a positive influence on the global problem. In conclusion, many people choose to buy lots of cheaper
clothes
instead
 of expensive ones. Notwithstanding
with
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this
 position, I prefer a mindful approach to shopping because of significant long-term benefits both for me and for our precious planet.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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