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The internet has greatly increased our access to information. To what extent do you think this is a good thing? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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New technologies have a significant impact on our daily lives. If twenty years ago humanity had relied mostly on TV, newspapers and books as dominant sources of
information
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 decades the situation has changed because of
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the ability
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 of individuals to use
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web sources for finding new knowledge. There are many positive aspects of using the internet for gathering
information
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. Nowadays by using foreign news websites and platforms people all around the world can read different points of view on current events and compare them using their critical thinking. It has an important impact on fighting with a dominance of propaganda in countries like Russia and Belarus.
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 is the main reason why
government
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 is trying to forbid many websites here.
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, internet users from
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 south” who live in poor conditions could absorb
information
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 from top universities by listening to lectures on YouTube and reading free electronic books.
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 knowledge could help them to fight poverty and build their own way to financial success in the rich world.
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, there are a few flaws in
information
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 availability all around the world. First of all,
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organised criminal gangs use free
information
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 flow to promote lucrative businesses. It is
well-known
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, that
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“darknet”
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the “darknet”
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 huge cartels appear on the yearly basis, trying to find a new niche for their illegal activities (mostly by selling drugs and guns).
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, new forms of fraud appear because of global
information
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 expansion. Nowadays criminals are not interested in physical assets. All they need is to get
passwords
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the passwords
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 and pin-codes of a particular person.
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 situation puts in serious danger children and old people who
are not experienced
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 users and could fall into the trap of fraudulent actions.
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,
internet
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the internet
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 has massive potential for creating
information
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 diversity in
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society and improving
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life quality by giving to people
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 ability to get useful
information
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.
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, thoughtful and accurate government regulation of
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 sphere is needed in order to prevent any
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 harm to humanity.
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