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Some feel that movies and tv shows are a good way to study history despite their lack of historical accuracy at times. To what extent do you agree or disagree? (0307)

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It is suggested that learning
history
 through historical video and television is a better way to extend their historical knowledge even though there is a lack of credibility.
While
 I agree that gaining
information
 from the media can help
learners
 in various ways, I believe that
people
also
 learn historical knowledge with reliable methods. On the one hand, some
people
 think that studying historical
movies
 and
tv
 shows has many advantages for
learners
 these days. Many
people
 can have
interests
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interest
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 in
history
 because videos usually are made with interesting stories.
In addition
, these media can help
learners
 to understand the historical context because of visual
information
.
As a consequence
, with
learners
' interests and understanding of the historical context,
people
 can access and study
history
 easier.
For example
, in South Korea, it is a
well known
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well-known
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 education method that many parents are used to
show
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showing
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 historical
movies
for
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to
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 their children to make them become interested in
history
.
On the other hand
, I believe that using other methods is better to study
history
 rather than watching historical
Tv
 shows and
movies
. First and foremost, studying with
books
 and lectures helps
people
 get clear historical
information
 and prevent mislearning
history
 because
TV
 shows and
movies
 are made based on historical facts, but they often exaggerate and reduce historical facts. On top of that, studying
with
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history
books
 helps to obtain broad historical
information
 because there are deep and specific details in the
books
 compared to videos.
Last
 but not least, it is evident that learning with lectures and
books
 is able to stream the entire
history
. In conclusion, even though there is a benefit
on
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 studying
history
 with videos and
TV
 shows, for me, studying
with
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in
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 other ways like the book and
lecture
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lectures
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 is
also
 advantageous to extend
people
’s historical knowledge deeply and broadly in terms of credibility.
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