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In the modern world, it is no longer necessary to use animals for food or use animal products for instance, clothing and medicines. to what exten do you agree or disagree.

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There is no doubt that in
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 new-age world,
lifestyle
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the lifestyle
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 and thinking of people have changed. There is a belief that animals should no longer be used for
food
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 and for other commodities
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 as clothes and medicines. In
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 essay, I will explain why I disagree with
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 opinion with examples.
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, since ancient times humans have been dependent on animals for
food
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.
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food
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 is not only rich in nutrients but is
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 important in curing many chronic diseases.
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,
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 its nutrition dense qualities many people including professional athletes and celebrities prefer
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 diet.
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,
body-builders
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bodybuilders
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 and weight-lifters who train their bodies because of their profession select a meat-based diet as it is rich in various nutrients. If they rely on a plant-based diet,
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 they would have to consume those meals in larger quantities.
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, products made from animals
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 as clothing and medicines have numerous benefits.
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, clothes made from wool can be useful in extreme cold conditions and silk being expensive is important for many livelihoods.
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, medicines like the premarin have been deduced successful in treating menstruation issues. Because of the benefits they offer, humans have become dependent on them and finding alternatives for the same products would be an extremely difficult task. In conclusion,
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 many communities are encouraging an eco-friendly use of
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 and materials. In my opinion, shifting from meat-based
food
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 and materials is a cumbersome task as we have been relying on them since the ancient times
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