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It will be better to have wide use of driverless cars for individuals and society. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?

#driverless #cars #individuals #society
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Some
people
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 argue that using
driverless
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cars
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 should be promoted now as it can make a contribution to
people
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 and our community. I do appreciate
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 statement, but in my opinion, some possible problems, resulting from its widespread, should not be trivialised. On the one hand, there are various benefits that come with the use of
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cars
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. First of all, they could improve driving safety, as we all know that a large proportion of traffic accidents are actually caused by human error,
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 as difficulty concentrating
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 fatigue, etc. 
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, using
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cars
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 could aid
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, especially the handicapped and elderly
people
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, by offering them access to go out freely.
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, with
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cars
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,
people
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 can spend time doing other things, like entertainment, during their commute or travelling as they are free from having to hold the steering wheel.
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,
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cars
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 are still considered by the populace as something high-tech.
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, it should not be expected that
people
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 will change their minds and accept
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 new design overnight, just as Rome could not be built in a day.
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, with the development and predictable wide spread of
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cars
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, the related new traffic rules may
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 need to be discussed and modified. Another ensuing social issue may be the unemployment of drivers, which should
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 be taken into account. In conclusion, I do support the use of
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cars
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 for their many merits.
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, we should not ignore the potential problems underneath it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • autonomous vehicles
  • artificial intelligence (AI)
  • sensors
  • human error
  • traffic congestion
  • mobility
  • displacement
  • fuel efficiency
  • carbon footprint
  • pollution control
  • ethical considerations
  • legal framework
  • data privacy
  • overreliance
  • system failures
  • connectivity
  • decision-making
  • security concerns
  • economic impact
  • maintenance
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