In many countries, the number of crimes committed by young people has increased rapidly. What do you think are the causes of this problem? How can parents and teachers help to solve it? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Adults are the most important part of the country's development.They are choosing a good path in their lives and future development.
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, A lot of criminal
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increased among young
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. In
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paragraph we discuss it. First of all, Most youngsters watch and follow movies
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after that they can create a group of
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act gangsters like robbery or unwanted social
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, some
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their poverty are doing illegal
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. In a short time , the period they need more money so they think
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way they can get more money easier.
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, In these stages, some
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are pushed or forced by other
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to do criminal acts.
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, The recent newspaper shows a lot of culprits are students or below the age of 25.
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, adults must know their responsibility for the future . Parents must watch closely their children's
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. to it will prevent illegal things.
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In school ,days children need to get aware of drugs and alcohol.Schools are the most valuable part of young
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's lives so must teach about
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laws and their punishment.At
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, the government should increase punishment days and
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bring new laws for young criminals.That means even if they are doing small criminal
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the punishment must be at least 1 year with the police school. In conclusion, Everyone must know about adult development .Young
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are pillars of an entire country.The adults must choose the best way for their life
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of criminal
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