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Some people think that good teamwork makes a company successful, others think that good leadership is the reason behind the success of a company. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Some people argue that teamwork plays a role in making a
company
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 successful though, others are of the opinion that having a good boss of
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company
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 is the main factor in the success of a
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. In my opinion, it is not enough not
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 one of these proper qualities of managing a
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, yet both features equally contribute to the thriving of a
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. On the one hand, it is apparent that both small-scale and big businesses
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 teamwork spirit created. The foremost benefit of it is that many big tasks and problems are likely to
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 collaborative work of colleges
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 since some issues require a range of opinions and discussion for being tackled.
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,
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 success of
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 is somewhat directly dependent on the employees’ levels of happiness,
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, encouraging
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 to work cooperatively can make any situation seem manageable and create an atmosphere of exchanging ideas and opinions.
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, there can be no
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likelihood of having any
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 and conflicts in working place, which might generally make a straight way for a
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 to reach rapidly
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thriving period.
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, the prospect of
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 prospect arguably has to do with good leadership
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 in some respects. To embark on, the final decision is needed by managers and executives to handle
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a particular issue which is riddled with uncertainties and difficulties.
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, regarding a wealth
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 and quality of directors,
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proper management can
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 lead to the rapid development of an organization. Another advantage of having a great leader is that managers are often skilled in keeping a balance between the qualities of being friendly and strict towards employees.
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, the more motivation and respect receive
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 employee from directors, the more they feel
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 sense of job satisfaction.
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, all may contribute to
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making a
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 successful. In conclusion,
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 some people have differing
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 whether
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good teamwork or leadership makes a difference in the
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 of a
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, I believe both qualities are equally crucial that can lead to fruitful results in the prospect of a
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.
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