The charts below show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia’s share of the Japanese tourist market. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The charts below show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia’s share of the Japanese tourist market.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
The graphs below illustrate the
number
of
Japanese
people who travel abroad between 1985 and 1995 and the percentage of
Japanese
tourists
in Australia’s market.
Overall
, the trend of
Japanese
tourism has increased over ten years,
in particular
, reaching its
peak
in the
last
years.
Firstly
the
number
of
Japanese
tourists
travelling abroad has trebled, starting at 5 and reaching its
peak
at 15 million people. The value shows a steady growth until 1990,
then
the
number
of people going abroad decreased slightly to just over 10 million in 1991.
Finally
, the
number
increased significantly during the second half of the decade, reaching its
peak
at 15 million
Japanese
travelling abroad.
Secondly
, Australia’s share of Japan’s tourist market registered a sharp increase during the decade analyzed. The percentage increased significantly until 1988 by 5 per cent,
then
the value decreased slightly in the following year to just over 4 points.
By contrast
, the percentage of
Japanese
tourists
travelling to Australia increased sharply, reaching its
peak
at 7 per cent in 1993. The two graphs provide the
overall
trend of
Japanese
tourists
travelling abroad, which has increased significantly between 1985 and 1995.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, japanese, tourists, peak with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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