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a large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sport team for two years or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked feedback from the general public

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Dear sir,
Me
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I
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 and my friends recently heard about your idea of sponsoring a sports
team
 or two concerts. In your interview, you said that you haven't decided yet. So, in
this
letter
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 my aim will be to help you with your decision. I have to say that both variants are cool and there
are
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is
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 not the wrong way. Let’s start
from
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with
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 two open-air concerts. It’s a great opportunity for people who don’t have enough possibilities to pay for the big concert and you can make them happy when they hear that the entrance will be free.
However
, I find the idea of sponsoring local children's sports
team
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teams
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 unbelievably great. That’s a great opportunity not only for that
team
,
for
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but for
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 you too.
For
example
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 let it be a basketball
team
. You can buy a new uniform for them with the logo of your company. They will be motivated for the victory and when they get 1st place in any tournament your company logo will see a big amount of people. So, that was my position. I hope
this
 letter can help you. Best wishes, Artur.
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