a large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sport team for two years or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked feedback from the general public

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and my friends recently heard about your idea of sponsoring a sports

team

or two concerts. In your interview, you said that you haven't decided yet. So, in

this

letter

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my aim will be to help you with your decision. I have to say that both variants are cool and there

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not the wrong way. Let’s start

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two open-air concerts. It’s a great opportunity for people who don’t have enough possibilities to pay for the big concert and you can make them happy when they hear that the entrance will be free.

However

, I find the idea of sponsoring local children's sports

team

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unbelievably great. That’s a great opportunity not only for that

team

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you too.

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let it be a basketball

team

. You can buy a new uniform for them with the logo of your company. They will be motivated for the victory and when they get 1st place in any tournament your company logo will see a big amount of people. So, that was my position. I hope

this

letter can help you. Best wishes, Artur.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Lexical resource: 5.0

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Grammatical Range: 5.0

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Task Achievement: 5.0

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a large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sport team for two years or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked feedback from the general public

Fully explain your ideas

With the increasing demand for energy sources of oil and gas, people should look for sources of oil and gas in remote and untouched natural places. Do the advantages outweigh disadvantages of damaging such areas?

The increase in the production of consumer goods results in damage to the natural environment. What are the causes of this? What can be done to solve this problem? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In many professional sports, there is an increase in the number of athletes using banned substances. What are the causes of this phonomenon and what are the some of possible solution

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