Some people think that it is better to educate girls and boys in separate schools. Others, however, believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed schools. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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preferance

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preference

preferences

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, others believe there are more positive

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derived from co-education. The former

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that students are more likely to have better academic performance,

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that mixed

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environment for young people to be socialized. First of all,

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a survey conducted in the UK regarding the academic performance in different educational institutions, it shows that in

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, young individuals are more likely

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their talents without

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stereotypes

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, there are more girls in

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who are good at subjects, which are believed that males have more

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, including

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mathematics

or science.

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, those who support boys and girls

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together

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suggest that compared to

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different

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for the acquisition of knowledge, there

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benefit

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provide

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them

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to accustomed to working together. On top of that, it will

fosters

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youth to show the best side of themselves,

such

as girls will talk softly and more boys willing to help out in the class.

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, it is inevitable that there are various merits for different sexs study together,

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, I tend to agree with the perks of studying in

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based on the fact that female students

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confident in many aspects, be it handling daily tasks or academic performance.

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separate schools
mixed schools
benefit
attending
advantages
focused
tailored education
reducing distractions
academic performance
gender-specific
learning needs
teaching methods
promotes
social interaction
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