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Some people think that local authorities should control where buildings can be constructed. Others think that everyone should be free to build where they like without obtaining permisson.Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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In my own country, there are strict laws about where
people
 are allowed to construct new buildings or
add
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 to existing ones. There are a number of reasons why many
people
 feel
such
 regulations are a good idea.
Firstly
, proponents believe that planning guarantees that local resources will be controlled properly. It is important,
for example
, to decide whether there will be enough water to supply the number of new
people
 moving into the area.
Secondly
, popular areas
such
 as those with
beautiful
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view
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views
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 might become spoiled if everyone can build there. Related to
this
 is the issue of consistency. In a street with a number of historical houses,
for instance
, it would be damaging to the character of the area to put up brand new houses or to add e new floor to an old house.
However
, critics of planning laws feel that the principle of freedom is an important one and that everyone should have the choice to build what they like
where
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 they wish. Those who take
this
 view say that
people
 are more important than building and if,
for example
, a family needs to extant their home to accommodate more children, there should be the flexibility to allow
this
. On balance,
although
 I am a strong supporter of freedom from regulation in many areas of life, I feel that when it comes to building it is crucial to have strict laws. Local governments are able to understand the biggest picture and take the long view, thinking of the good of the majority in any community both now and
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 future.
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