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Some people think city planners should create more green spaces and plant trees. Other believe that they should focus on building new home. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Although
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 it is sometimes thought that growing
trees
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 and making
gardens
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 by
city
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maker
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makers
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 ought to be good, other
people
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 believe that the focus should be on developing new houses. In my opinion, I consider that growing up
more
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with more
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 greenery by local government in
local
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the local
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 region helps
people
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 better
for
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apply
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their life. On the one hand, some
people
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 think that
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city
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the city
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 council does great
jobs
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job
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 by growing more greenery in
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city
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the city
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 and I agree. I mean, growing more plants and making more
gardens
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 not only help
to
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birds and animals, but they help
to
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apply
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human beings.
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,
trees
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 give shelter to birds and local animals like cows and dogs etc.
People
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 can
also
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 rest behind the tree.
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,
People
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 are now going to
gardens
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 for doing exercise. Many of the local charity is arranging exercise training classes
into
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in
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 the
gardens
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.
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,
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 are one of the sources of
rain
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the rain
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 cycle process. If
trees
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is
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are
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 not available
in
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on
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 the land
then
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 it might chance not to come rain and
rain
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the rain
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 cycle process can be ruined.
On the other hand
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, it is often believed that developing more houses
are
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is
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 beneficial for
the
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apply
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individuals. Research said that the population is increasing day by day, which means
people
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 need more houses to live
.
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in.
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Therefore
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, the government should concentrate to build homes and it is useful too for them,
according to
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 some.
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, if
people
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 live in high-rise buildings or flats, they have
chance
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 to meet diverse
people
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 and build relationships. Another reason
is
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why
people
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 focus on building apartments is that soil does not blow in the air and
area
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the area
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remain
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remains
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 clean.
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,
people
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 are not suffering from
health
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a health
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issue
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issues
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 which is
cause
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caused
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 by soil. In conclusion, in recent years, some
people
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 tend to make more
gardens
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 and
growing
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grow
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 more plants in their
city
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,
while
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other
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others
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 thought that making
home
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a home
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 helps better
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then
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 that.
While
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people
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 may vary in their opinions, I think that
people
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 stand a better life if they are encouraged to grow greenery
arround
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around
 the
city
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.

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