"Some people think that the detailed criminal description on newspapers and TV has bad influences, so this kind of information should be restricted in the media." Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give your own opinion.

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or not news related to criminal

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could give

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advert impact

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society.

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essay will identify my personal view which is of the opinion that

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imformation

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should be put restriction on to some extent, considering the two main points regarding potential criminals and ex-offences. The most

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respect when media shares criminal

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is its great effect

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society as a whole.

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it has the power to scare ordinary people, it

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to motivate

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individuals

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offence. In

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situation,

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might supply them with advantageous detail,

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prison sentence, which would be

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for them to avoid the

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information when planning. Another danger point we should be aware

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the recent increasing percentage of

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offence

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. I believe it can be attributed to the current sharing culture by

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mass media

since any

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criminal

history

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never concealed from

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after they reported to

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, when an ex-prisoner applied for a job, the offered firm would search

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name

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online and his name would come up with his crime data. It would discourage the enterprise to hire him regardless of his capacity and lead him to

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crime because he would not have any tools to earn money to survive in

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nomal

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society.

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problem

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the world embraced in the

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century improving, crime has still remained

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an ongoing issue for us. I believe it has been up to

media

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the media

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to some extent,

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they should restrict themselves in order not to lead any people to be an offender.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

296 words

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"Some people think that the detailed criminal description on newspapers and TV has bad influences, so this kind of information should be restricted in the media." Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give your own opinion.

A cafe near your home puts some chairs and tables on the pavement for customers. This creates a problem for you. Write a letter to the cafe manager to complain about this matter. In your letter describe the problem; explain how it affects you; say what you will do if this matter is not resolved.

Some people say that ebooks and modern technology will replace traditional newspaper and magazine. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outwigh the disadvantages?