"Some people think that the detailed criminal description on newspapers and TV has bad influences, so this kind of information should be restricted in the media." Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give your own opinion.

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controvertial

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whether

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or not news related to criminal

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could give

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advert impact

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society.

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essay will identify my personal view which is of the opinion that

such

imformation

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information

should be put restriction on to some extent, considering the two main points regarding potential criminals and ex-offences. The most

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respect when media shares criminal

contents

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is its great effect

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society as a whole.

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it has the power to scare ordinary people, it

also

has another

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possibility

to motivate

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individuals

who attempt to engage

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offence. In

this

situation,

media

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might supply them with advantageous detail,

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prison sentence, which would be

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for them to avoid the

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misbehaviour

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may provide

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offences

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with

benefitial

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beneficial

information when planning. Another danger point we should be aware

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the recent increasing percentage of

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offence

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. I believe it can be attributed to the current sharing culture by

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mass media

since any

crinimal

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criminal

history

are

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never concealed from

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the internet

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after they reported to

public

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the public

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, when an ex-prisoner applied for a job, the offered firm would search

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name

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online and his name would come up with his crime data. It would discourage the enterprise to hire him regardless of his capacity and lead him to

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the next

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crime because he would not have any tools to earn money to survive in

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nomal

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normal

society.

Thus

, In conclusion, despite plenty of

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problems

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problem

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the world embraced in the

last

century improving, crime has still remained

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an ongoing issue for us. I believe it has been up to

media

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the media

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to some extent,

hence

they should restrict themselves in order not to lead any people to be an offender.

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