Nowadays families are not as close as they used to be. What do you think are the causes of this? What can be done to make families closer?

From the first day of birth
people
’s lives start with meeting with relatives. We can’t even understand what is happening around us, but we are able to feel comfort and love from a family with their activity. Some scientists explain
this
as hormonal reactions and others as natural feelings between relatives.
However
, after having a close relationship with our families, we start to explore
this
world just by ourselves.
Firstly
, children come to kindergarten, study at school and
as a result
meet their peers and other
people
. So, the comfort zone changes with new experiences and new feelings. The first cause of non-close relationships with families might be the essential desire of having independence. It is an ordinary situation in kindergarten or in primary school when your mother or dad help with simple things like preparing clothes, putting the right books in the bag and making some food for lunch,
whereas
in secondary or high school, you should be able to do
this
without parent’s help or with minor help. These conditions can be created by friends, who already do a lot of important thighs without help. In that case, many children start thinking the other way, and when they realize that independence really exists they don’t need that deep connection with family anymore. The second cause of distant relationships with families is the era of digital life.
For example
, we don't need offline communication, we have the possibility to make a phone call with or without video
instead
of wasting
time
in traffic when we don’t live in the same place with family.
This
situation
also
makes
people
a little lazy and,
as a result
, they just don’t see the necessity of extra communication with family. So,
people
just continue to live their lives and focus on themselves.
This
problem can be solved if
people
start to manage their
time
and try to find a couple of hours in a week for spending
time
with family in advance.
Also
, they can include different activities or meetings in cafes for brunch that can help to spend
time
together in a more interesting way, properly and with benefit for each member of the family.
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