In many countries, schoolchildren are required to wear school uniforms. Do you think should this be enforced in all schools?

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Nowadays, in some
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children are required to
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in uniforms when attending
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. In my opinion, I consider wearing a
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code should be compulsory in educational institutions because of many reasons and benefits offered by them,
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as discipline, safety, security
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equality.
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a
dress
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code helps create a disciplined atmosphere and an optimistic environment in schools and
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eradicates any inequality between rich and poor pupils. Uniforms keep
students
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focused on their education, not their clothes
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creating a level playing field among them and
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peer pressure and bullying.
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,
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leads to there being no discrimination between poor and richer ones, all are considered equals on
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premises, and
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enhances the relationship bond with each other.
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, pupils who belong to affluent families and others who hailed from an impoverished society adorn the same garments when they go to
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. If
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norm is not practised,
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the rich kids might show off in front of their colleagues and in
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,way teenagers will be focused on their appearance rather than on their studies.
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, the institution's
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code provides safety and security
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creating a sense of identity within educational institutions. Since the schools endorsed the implementation of uniforms among the
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promoted discipline and
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to a decrease in
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violence.
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, every
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has a set of costumes
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unique to them
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has its badge or logo emblazoned on the chest and is used to identify
students
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as belonging to a given
school
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. They help to quickly identify
students
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and it is much easier to spot intruders in the
school
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compound when everyone else is in a uniform.
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is key to dealing with them before they can put anyone at risk or cause damage to the
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property. In conclusion, I believe that the uniform must be mandatory. It is irrefutable that uniform plays a significant role in maintaining discipline in schools, and children would enhance their quality of life when they follow the policy of institutes to minimize chances of bullying based on socio-economic status and boost self-esteem when all the
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feel the same
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boosts performance.
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