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Some people say that main aim of advertising is to improve sales of products that people do not really need. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is believed by some people that advertising’s main goal is to increase the
amount
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 of profits from
products
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, even though people do not
need
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. I mostly agree with
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 suggestion because advertisements manipulate
the
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people’s
interest
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interests
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with
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by
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 creating desires
such
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 as new fashion and new food.
Additionally
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, they use some information
of
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about
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 people to create their probable needs via web services.
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, advertisement streams usually are made to appeal
individuals’
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to individuals’
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 interests to sell
products
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. Generally, in the moment of releasing new
products
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, they make aggressive
introduction
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introductions
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 in channels and internet browsers to attract consumers’ interests.
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, in
summer
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the summer
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 seasons, most
of
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apply
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channels
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the channels
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 stream new
ice-cream
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ice cream
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products
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 consistently. Despite their needless, most consumers would decide to buy these
products
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 in the end.
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, many
companies
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 use some tricky ways to sell their new clothes. They use shiny colours of some t-shirts and even though a consumer has one of these, they tend to buy one more.
Secondly
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, some
companies
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 share consumers’ information
to
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with
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 other
companies
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 to boost their sales.
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, they do some research about a particular client’s probable needs.
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, they call or bring pop-up ads to consumers’ smart telephones to inform new
their
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products
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. Their main
intend
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intent
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 is providing to be felt their some consumers as
a
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special one.
By
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 these improvements, some consumers create a tie with
companies
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 and they buy some
products
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 even they do not need.
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, these imposing actions by advertisements provide new sales. In conclusion, causes and examples can be multiplied with
this
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 suggestion.
Although
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, advertisements have some positive impact in terms of
the
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people’s product preferences, in my opinion, their main aim is to boost
companies
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’ sales with some tricky streams and leaking information. 46 dk.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • advertising
  • consumer behavior
  • perceived need
  • luxury goods
  • brand loyalty
  • psychological tactics
  • emotional appeal
  • social status
  • purchasing behavior
  • essential products
  • marketed
  • information dissemination
  • misleading
  • want vs need
  • consumer awareness
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