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More and more people want to buy famous brands of clothes, cars and other products. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

#people #brands #clothes #cars #products #development
The topic of
growing
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the growing
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 consumption of trendy goods from famous designers has become extremely popular over the
last
cemtury
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century
.
However
, there are opposite points of view: some people suppose that buying trendy clothes or cars is a marker of
growing
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the growing
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wealthy
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wealth
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 of the countries' population,
while
 others presume that
such
 consumption is just a new addiction. Frankly speaking, I stand with the second group. Trendy expensive clothes got
its
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their
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 popularity
for in
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at
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 the begging of the 20th century. People were fond of these goods
due to
 their originality and high quality,
however
, times tend to change. Today, some of
top-brands
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the top-brands
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 are simply
overprised
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overpriced
due to
 their famous owners. There is a tendency to buy all the
famouse
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famous
 and luxury
staff
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stuff
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 only to buy a colourful label. Consumers just cannot stop the process of renewing clothes in their wardrobes and cars in garages.
Therefore
, they are addicted to shopping. In conclusion, I intend to say that it is a negative tendency of
increasing
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an increasing
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 number of
peoply
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people
 with a hobby like buying new brand goods.
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