The diagram below shows the changes, which took place in a coastal area called Pentland from 1950 to 2007

The two diagrams illustrate the development of Pentland, a coastal place after 57 years. Looking at the

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perspective, it is readily apparent that

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are were many changes in the field, and building structures were built in the grassland on the lower part. The shoreline, on the uppermost

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was

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developed into a beautiful marina. The grassland

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located in the south

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replaced by a cinema and shops on the left. of houses can be seen on the right. The industrial field on the Northeast side became a huge multi-storey car parking structure and an oval-shaped swimming pool is connected to a beautifully landscaped place situated on the left. The sea range in the middle was transformed and developed into a marina. Multiple

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was parked in the Bay range. On the opposite side of the

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bay gorgeous rows of houses were established and more shopping areas below can be seen.