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Some students agree that internet-based lectures is better type lectures. The other students tend to believe that university-based lectures is still needed. Explain your opinion for both sides of the view.

#students #lectures #type
In the few years of
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pandemic
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 the current view on
studies
have
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 drastically changed from the classical
university
 in-class type of
studies
. The way of getting information
have
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 shifted to online lessons rather than
university based
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university-based
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 lectures. In
this
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 I would like to look at it from two different perspectives
such
 as in-class and remote
studies
. The era of
internet
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the internet
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 not only gives the opportunity to attend
majority
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the majority
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 of
studies
 online
,
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 but
also
 allows
to
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one to
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 enter
the
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universities in different countries from any part of the world. Students, who decided to study
remote
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remotely
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 can pick as many modules and attend classes
at
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in
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 the comfort of their own homes without the need of spending time and money on travel and
accomodation
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accommodation
.
However
 studying online limits the student
on
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to
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 mostly
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 on his own, without human interaction, which can
result
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inresult
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 an isolated type of professional in the future,
what
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 would only rely on himself and his own knowledge. On another hand, if we look at students, who decided to attend
the
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university based
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 lectures, not only
they
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 get valuable information, but they
also
 socialize, learn how to work in groups, practice
real life
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scenarious
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scenarios
, and interact with other students and lecturers.
Moreover
 during
studies
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their studies
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in
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the
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university
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,university
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 young people might make
life long
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lifelong
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 friends, find
love
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the love
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 of their life and implement the knowledge in practice.
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