Some people believe that it is wrong to keep animals in zoos, while others think that zoos are both entertaining and ecologically important. Discus both views.

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getting hurt by living in
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zoos
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another point is that certain types of
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animal
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zoo
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danger from them.
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this
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the
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both views of the statement.
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could
be
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be
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in the
zoo
but not in every species. Some
of
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the
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animals
have to be kept in
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zoos
but not every
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of
them
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one
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like a dog or a cat.
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that is
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prohibited
to
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for
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ordinary
people
to own like in some countries a tiger or lion. These kinds of
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animal
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animals
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must have a specific rule to own and need only able to be
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by
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zoos
or an organisation that
have
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knowledge about them.
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, if it is a
types
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like a dog or a cat
this
kind of
animals
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animal
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should let
a
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normal
people
to
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be able to own. They do not need to be in
the
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zoos
.
On the other hand
, We need to make
zoos
appropriate for
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the animal
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animal
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animals
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to be able
entertraining
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entertaining
enter training
and ecologically as well. For the reason is that many
zoo
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zoos
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have
not
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treat
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treated
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the animal
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animal
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animals
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well enough to make
animal
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animals
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suiable
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suitable
or in a good condition to show something to
people
in a
zoo
.
For instance
, if we caught
animals
in a bad environment
of
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zoos
or
not
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provide
a good food
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a portion of good food
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for
animals
.
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might lead to not
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for anima to be in the
zoo
and work for
people
. In conclusion,
people
have
thier
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their
own perspective on how we should
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the
animals
by
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from
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caring about them to getting hurt or to forcing
to
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them to
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work for
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entertaining
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I already
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my point of
views
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on both
side
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above
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the statement.
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