You eat at your college cafeteria every lunchtime. However, you think it needs some improvements. Write a letter to the college magazine. In your letter, explain what you like about the cafeteria. Say what is wrong with it. Suggest how it could be improved.

Dear
Mr.
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Smith, I usually come to the
cafeteria
at lunchtime. As a loyal member, I truly enjoy the service here. The customer representatives are friendly and knowledgeable. They are very passionate about assisting us.
Additionally
, the food is
also
amazing. I can't mention how I like the steak here.
However
, I believe that the restaurant is not spacious enough. During lunch and dinner time, there is a massive number of students coming here, but they have to queue for a long time since we don't have sufficient room. Eventually, if the
cafeteria
does not expand and students still need to wait for more than 15 minutes to enter it, they will choose our competitors. In light of that, I would like you to enlarge the
cafeteria
.
Although
the construction requires a considerable amount of money, a bigger restaurant can definitely attract more students and external customers. Since the queue time is lowered, these guests can be more satisfied and
thus
they will be more likely to choose
this
cafeteria
for their lunches or dinners. Revenue will
also
soar with additional customers. I look forward to hearing from you about the ways that you would tackle the problem. Sincerely,
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