You eat at your college cafeteria every lunchtime. However, you think it needs some improvements. Write a letter to the college magazine. In your letter, explain what you like about the cafeteria. Say what is wrong with it. Suggest how it could be improved.

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Dear

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Smith, I usually come to the

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at lunchtime. As a loyal member, I truly enjoy the service here. The customer representatives are friendly and knowledgeable. They are very passionate about assisting us.

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, the food is

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amazing. I can't mention how I like the steak here.

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, I believe that the restaurant is not spacious enough. During lunch and dinner time, there is a massive number of students coming here, but they have to queue for a long time since we don't have sufficient room. Eventually, if the

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does not expand and students still need to wait for more than 15 minutes to enter it, they will choose our competitors. In light of that, I would like you to enlarge the

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the construction requires a considerable amount of money, a bigger restaurant can definitely attract more students and external customers. Since the queue time is lowered, these guests can be more satisfied and

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they will be more likely to choose

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for their lunches or dinners. Revenue will

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soar with additional customers. I look forward to hearing from you about the ways that you would tackle the problem. Sincerely,

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

199 words

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