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Artificial Intelligence will soon replace teachers in the classroom. Do you agree with this statement? What is an alternative to traditional face-to-face learning?

#intelligence #teachers #classroom #alternative
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technology
 and with the new innovation on daily
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aritificial
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artificial
 intelligence is now getting more and more advance and
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it's to be considered as they could
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teachers in
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schools in the near future. I totally
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disagree with
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nowadays are
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 on the
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technology
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 which
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 their life way easier, especially schools are getting more advantages from them to teach the
students
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teacher
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 to resolve their problems and provide them
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 of children who have different ways to capture
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things and only teachers can read their
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 and can give proper guidance to them that how they can improve themselves.
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mistakes and give the solution to
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 but the understanding of the topic can only provide by the teachers.
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 of sites on
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 where
students
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 doing their homework but the detailed work can only happen if the tutor had taught the child in
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 manner. Various alternatives are there to replace the traditional coaching
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discussion
 in the classroom just like by providing
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online courses if the student is far away from the school or any college and by sitting at home they can take advantage of the topics and gain knowledge as much as they can . In
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provide
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 one virtual class at the
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 of the week and provide
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 kind of
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presentations
 so that
students
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, if there is any confusion with the topic student can clarify it in the next class or either
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 private message . In conclusion,
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 believe that
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 classroom can not be
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replaced
 as
this
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 failures and can use his/her own mind with
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direct communication with the professor where the
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 to do that.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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  • Virtual reality
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  • Online learning platforms
  • Massive Open Online Courses (MOOCs)
  • Blended learning
  • Social learning platforms
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  • Peer-to-peer interactions
  • Technological integration
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  • Real-time data analysis
  • Scalable education solutions
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