IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 6

The diagram below shows the changes, which took place in a coastal area called Pentland from 1950 to 2007

The diagram below shows the changes, which took place in a coastal area called Pentland from 1950 to 2007
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The diagram given illustrates the differences in Pentland between 1950 and 2007. There are many changes seen
from
Change preposition
in
show examples
 the diagram and it shows
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
urbanization. In 1950, there was a big ocean in the northern part of the town
in
Change preposition
of
show examples
 Pentland. On the left
side
Use synonyms
 of the main
road
Use synonyms
, there was an industrial area and
grassland
Use synonyms
. On the right
side
Use synonyms
 of the main
road
Use synonyms
, there was mostly
grassland
Use synonyms
 except for a car park.
In contrast
Linking Words
, in 2007, a new
road
Use synonyms
 was built alongside the sea and people can enjoy the yacht in the sea. There was a park connected to a swimming pool and a multi-storey car park on the right
side
Use synonyms
 of the
road
Use synonyms
, where it used to be an industrial area.
Grassland
Use synonyms
 was replaced with shops and
cinema
Fix the agreement mistake
cinemas
show examples
 under the industrial area. On the right
side
Use synonyms
 of the main
road
Use synonyms
, new apartments were built alongside the sea and there were shops and homes
instead
Linking Words
 of
grassland
Use synonyms
.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
▼
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words side, road, grassland with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
▼
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: