The diagram below shows the changes, which took place in a coastal area called Pentland from 1950 to 2007

The diagram below shows the changes, which took place in a coastal area  called Pentland from 1950 to 2007
The diagram given illustrates the differences in Pentland between 1950 and 2007. There are many changes seen
from
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the diagram and it shows
the
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urbanization. In 1950, there was a big ocean in the northern part of the town
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Pentland. On the left
side
of the main
road
, there was an industrial area and
grassland
. On the right
side
of the main
road
, there was mostly
grassland
except for a car park.
In contrast
, in 2007, a new
road
was built alongside the sea and people can enjoy the yacht in the sea. There was a park connected to a swimming pool and a multi-storey car park on the right
side
of the
road
, where it used to be an industrial area.
Grassland
was replaced with shops and
cinema
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under the industrial area. On the right
side
of the main
road
, new apartments were built alongside the sea and there were shops and homes
instead
of
grassland
.
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