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Fast food is becoming one part of life everywhere; this has bad effects on our lifestyles and diet. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#food #part #life #effects #lifestyles #diet
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In contemporary society,
people
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 tend to have less free
time
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; they don't even have enough
time
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 for eating. That was how fast
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 become popular and has been a part of human life ever since. In my opinion, I agree with the statement that it has negative effects on diet.
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, it has positive impacts on
people
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's lifestyles.
To begin
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 with, fast
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 surely can become adverse to
people
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's diet in long term. It usually contains processed
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, extra sodium, unhealthy fat, and many ingredients that have been proven that will lead to many deceases. The most obvious result of overconsumption of fast
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 is obesity: frequent fast
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 consumers' bodies will not be fast enough to digest and drain unhealthy substances out.
On the other hand
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, Fast
food
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 became popular for decades for a reason. it helps
people
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 to save a lot of
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 waiting for
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. Many
people
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 don't want to waste
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 during lunch or in the morning, especially workers who have limited lunch
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. Traditional restaurants where they will need to sit and wait for the
food
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 to be cooked can be considered a waste of
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 and the factor that will prevent them from being punctual. In conclusion, I agree that fast
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 has bad effects on the diet since it can cause diseases and make
people
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 unhealthy. At the same
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, I
also
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 disagree that it has drawbacks to mankind's lifestyle. it can help
people
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 save a lot of their
time
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, and
time
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 is the most valuable thing in the modern world.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • obesity
  • diabetes
  • heart diseases
  • nutritional deficiency
  • malnutrition
  • convenience
  • nutritional value
  • busy lifestyles
  • balanced meals
  • economic impact
  • lower-income groups
  • healthier alternatives
  • cultural heritage
  • culinary diversity
  • mass production
  • environmental degradation
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