With the improvements in today’s health care, society has to care for more and more elderly people. Do you feel that society will be able to cope with the increase in numbers of elderly people today and how can it be managed? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Medical care is one of the most important
subject
in a country to keep its Change to a plural noun
subjects
people
in
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apply
a
significant productivity. An improvement Remove the article
apply
of
health care, it is said that Change preposition
in
people
have to pay attention more on
elderly Change preposition
to
people
that their number has increased. It might worry people
whether they could handle this
urgency. I am personally sure that this
increasing number of old retired people
is not a big deal as those very aged people
are also
human. They are no more than weak.
Caring grandmas
or grandpas sometimes feels like treating babies. They need others to take care of their own selves, but the difference is there is Change preposition
for grandmas
not
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no
a
hope as children have, but only gratitude for what they have done Remove the article
apply
to
society. Change preposition
for
Although
it seems burden
somehow, they are not active Correct article usage
a burden
people
, they do not need travelling
or Change the verb form
to travel
going
to Wrong verb form
go
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the club
a club
club
. Briefly, they do not require other than basic needs. Little money to take Fix the agreement mistake
clubs
this
over, instead
.
Another reason why people
should not worry of
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about
elderly's
increasing number is that some of them still want to be productive as Correct article usage
the elderly's
it
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is
happens
in some Wrong verb form
happening
country
like Germany and Singapore, Fix the agreement mistake
countries
for instance
. People
in age 65 and more, remain working as waiters, even. It is reported that they do not do it for money. Instead
, they work because of habit or pleasure. Regarding these two countries, people
around the world could manage their elderly community to find their preference
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preferred
activity
that still Fix the agreement mistake
activities
contribute
to society.
In conclusion, if Change the verb form
contributes
people
could see deeply, elderly people
are not burdens
in a country. They are still human, too, that could live Add a missing verb
be burdens
their
own with responsibility. Change preposition
on their
Furthermore
, what people
can do towards this
situation is as usual that is
to assist people
in need whether what they need is money or an opportunity.Submitted by salwafahanim on
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