With the improvements in today’s health care, society has to care for more and more elderly people. Do you feel that society will be able to cope with the increase in numbers of elderly people today and how can it be managed? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Medical care is one of the most important
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in a country to keep its
people
in
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a
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significant productivity. An improvement
of
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health care, it is said that
people
have to pay attention more
on
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elderly
people
that their number has increased. It might worry
people
whether they could handle
this
urgency. I am personally sure that
this
increasing number of old retired
people
is not a big deal as those very aged
people
are
also
human. They are no more than weak. Caring
grandmas
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or grandpas sometimes feels like treating babies. They need others to take care of their own selves, but the difference is there is
not
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a
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hope as children have, but only gratitude for what they have done
to
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society.
Although
it seems
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somehow, they are not active
people
, they do not need
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or
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to
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the club
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club
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. Briefly, they do not require other than basic needs. Little money to take
this
over,
instead
. Another reason why
people
should not worry
of
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elderly's
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the elderly's
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increasing number is that some of them still want to be productive as
it
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happens
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in some
country
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countries
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like Germany and Singapore,
for instance
.
People
in age 65 and more, remain working as waiters, even. It is reported that they do not do it for money.
Instead
, they work because of habit or pleasure. Regarding these two countries,
people
around the world could manage their elderly community to find their
preference
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activity
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that still
contribute
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to society. In conclusion, if
people
could see deeply, elderly
people
are not
burdens
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in a country. They are still human, too, that could live
their
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own with responsibility.
Furthermore
, what
people
can do towards
this
situation is as usual
that is
to assist
people
in need whether what they need is money or an opportunity.
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