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Differences between countries become less evident each year. Nowadays, all over the world people share the same fashions, advertising, brands, eating habits and TV channels. Do the disadvantages of this trend outweigh the advantages?

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There is no evidence between areas year by year. These days a number of
people
 recommend to each other their traditional clothing, announcements, trends,
way
 of consuming and
also
 watching television programs. From my point of view, the disadvantages of these actions are higher than the advantages. Nowadays we are living in a world where technology is well developed and
this
 is creating for individuals perfect opportunities to know more about other
countries
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 traditions.
For instance
, social media is the most popular
way
 of sharing information, which makes
people
 aware of other cultures. Because by sharing information about local things,
such
 as what is tradable now or which merchandise is popular among locals. It helps
people
 to live more comfortably and avoid being less informed about other countries peoples'
way
 of living.
However
, sharing information about local communities can be quite
an
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unpleasant
way
, because it can seriously affect the country's trade and traditions. Many
people
 claim that they should not let others know about their own culture, as it can lead to some kind of confusion between cultures. Each country has their own
way
 of expressing, living and working and these are the main differences between them.
To conclude
,
people
 share their own local lifestyle secrets with other nations and
this
 is a negative viewpoint as it effects seriously on their lives.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural globalization
  • Cultural exchange
  • Cross-cultural communication
  • Assimilation
  • Homogenization
  • Acculturation
  • Traditional customs
  • Local economies
  • Diversity
  • Inclusion
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